What do you think of the first page of my story? And be truthful.

wow, it was really good and descriptive!!! the only poat that I was a little confused about was about the girl yelling....was she on the cruise ship. how about change it to .....Jacob could hear a girl yelling as the taste of seawater filled his mouth while he fought to stay above the surface of the grinding waves.....something more like that other wise it's really good. are you writing a book or is this for a paper or something?